Dante Evans(done)

[Dante Evans]

Name:Dante Evans

Occupation:Apprentice warrior

Nationality:American

Age: 20

Height: 5.6

Weight: 126

Hair Color: brown

Eye Color: hazel

Appearance:

Personality:its mostly on his mood hes usually in a good mood could be abit paranoid bout meeting new people but as soon as he gets to know someone hes ok with it.

History:Dante was a driffter when his father was around traveling from one country to another on earth.He knew very little about his mother he was told by his father that they divorced.His father taught him how to fight and survive will travelling at the age 15, they had a good relationship. at the age of 17 they were victims of car crash that involvs a truck his father is in a comma and thats how Dante got the scar.He is tryng to become a soldier to keep his life going and keeping his father in the hospital.thats why he is atending arcane acadmy.they have enough in there aveings for now.so he is going to study and find a job part time just in case.

Style:brute,uses magic mostly to mend the ground eg.tremor, wall and a siple fire ball.

Strengths:his strength and durability are his power housses.can double wield his sowrds and guns.would neveer understemate his opponenet ,location, state and gives it all hes got in a fight.

Weaknesses:not that bright. lacks commen sense."shoot now ask questions later".he had verry little interaction with other people and so he might come in an akward position with friends.

Spell List:simple fire ball(self explaintory),trmmor9makes the ground shake fro a while makeing the emy drop theri gaurd or off target),wall(produces a wall from the ground for minimum of 3 minutes the wall is no taller than he is)


Weapons/Gear:twin medium sized sowrds usually crisscrossed over his back a dager in his belt. and twin 45. cals.the sowerd have a little magic in them when Dante wants he can ignite them the would be converd in flames)

[The Corrector]

You need much more detail in several areas.

One, History. What you have there tells me almost nothing about Mr. Evans.

Two, Style. Go into depth of his style, what you have there is nothing but a physical behavior, you must put his magical style, even if it is simple physical enhancement to support his 'Warrior' Occupation.

Three, Strengths and Weaknesses. In general you need more detail.

Four, Weapons/Gear. If you can, provide pictures, if you can't at least provide a brief description.

I do understand that this is incomplete, but these are the areas you need alot of work on.

[The Corrector]

Well, It is pretty bare minimum, all things considered. There are also alot of Grammatical errors, but then again, so do a lot of sheets.

APPROVED!