My anger, and the reasons for it.

[Roy Atenwood]

A freeform poem I wrote a while ago, after nearly getting stabbed by an ex-girlfriend.


Why am I angry?
I'll tell you why,
People use you, abuse you and don't even care
They lie
They cheat
They steal
They kill
They show no remorse when the hurt you
They treat you like shit

Why am I angry?
You have no clue
You talk about your problems
People don't like you
You hate your parents
You whine, you bitch, you moan
Well you know what?
I hate you, too

Why am I angry?
I just can't stop
I try to help and life spits in my face
I get my ass beat
I get mugged
But I still go on
I still fought them off her
Even though they had knives
Even though I knew them
She tried to kill me once I saved her
Why the fuck is that?

Why am I angry?
People like you.


This most likely sucks, but I thought "What the hell, I'll submit it anyway.".

[cloche]

The idea of it is good, the flow works well but if you added some rhyme scheme I think that would make it really good and improve the flow.

The point gets across which is good, and I like your style. I think if you work on it it should be fine.

[Erin]

It's good, but kind of depressing and if not just a little cliche.

I prefer this saying: "Sex sells and once you've sold sex you can turn around and sell the sex you've sold in a steamy tell-all novel."

Ahh yes, words to live by.

[Nanashi]

roy said:

Why am I angry?
I'll tell you why,
People use you, abuse you and don't even care
They lie
They cheat
They steal
They kill
They show no remorse when the hurt you
They treat you like shit

Is any of that stanza reflected in your character's history?

Just wondering. Good poem, by the way.

[Roy Atenwood]

Actually, that comes from life experiance, but now that I think about it, it seems to.

I wrote this 2 years before I even started RPing, actually.

Thanks for all the feedback, I'm not really a poet, and it was good to hear that it was OK.

[Fukushuu no Mumei]

Well, I've read it, and it is rather cliche. Has any of this happened to you? I've seen so many people that want to live in cliche for attention, and have read stories and poems that people put out to sound like they have life hard. I'll be frank, things don't go well for me. I've yet to meet one person outside my family that has the internet and doesn't have a hard life. I've yet to meet one person other than myself or my sisters that have bad things happen to them on a daily basis.

So what's your personal experience you speak of?

-=}N{=-

[Roy Atenwood]

The experiance I speak of?


Well, I broke up with a girl who was a complete bitch. I caught her in bed with my sister (Yeah, that bad.), and she stormed out of my dad's house barely dressed, screaming at me, and telling me it was my fault.

Two days later, a couple of dudes, one with a switchblade, were trying to mug her, so I beat the hell out of them. She picked up the switchblade afterward and tried to stab me in the back when I walked away.

One of my favorite examples that I use to shut up that idiot at Starbucks who yaks on and on about the blackness of his soul.

[Fukushuu no Mumei]

Ok, the last one I believe, and the first part of the first one, but the second one is just out there. Still, if that's how you realy feel, suck it up. In your poem, you say not to bitch and whine, but that's what the poem is, bitching.

-=}N{=-

[Roy Atenwood]

I wrote it a while ago, and posted it on a dare, and I agree.


I was a little emo idiot then, and I'm over it now. I feel like going back in time and slapping myself with a trout or something.

[Fukushuu no Mumei]

As long as it's a different person, yeah, you seem to have changed. Pain through anger doesn't always work, though. You wouldn't feel any of this it would have actually happened.

-=}N{=-

[Roy Atenwood]

I've actually worked it into a comedy routine.


I should post that, soon.